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Technique Aug 06, 2008
By Bonnie B. Hayes
I really like the topic of Egyptology and the story is interesting enough, but there are some issues here concerning writing technique. Throughout the whole book the dialogue writing is all wrong and all smushed together. This makes me wonder if the author has ever read a book to see how it's usually done. Please find out the proper way before publishing another book.On page 27 Dr. Casper is described as having "soft brunette brown hair" which is a bit redundant.Speaking of redundancy, it seems like every five minutes the character is talking about having a fateful feeling about the near future. A little advice here, some repetition can be good for emphasis, but it can also bore the heck out of the reader so use it sparingly.I don't want to tear you a new one, like I said, I do find the story interesting for the most part. I'd just like to see the amateur writing mistakes cleared up.
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